Hey Sam - a very succinct story idea; my only slight reservation comes in regard to Act 2, where I think you may have to strengthen the threat implied by the technician's interest - by giving this character a toolbelt, or a bin on wheels, or just something to imply more strongly that this guy is the guy who dismantles robot exhibits; indeed, I suggest you do away entirely with the other 2 security guards and make this all about the dismantling guy as the robot's nemesis - it's cleaner that way - and makes it 'character vs. character' and makes the 'dismantle guy' the robot's principle obstacle between him and his goal (freedom). In terms of character design, the 'dismantle guy' can become much more defined and 'villainous' as a result.
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This essay analyses the story and structure of Edgar Wright’s Scott Pilgrim vs. The World (2010). The importance of editing in general terms is discussed with reference to Introduction to Film Editing (1989, Bernard Balmuth) and The Thames and Hudson Manual of Film Editing (1981, Roger Crittenden). The specific editing style of Scott Pilgrim vs. the World is discussed with reference to (be specific) and (be specific) and in relation to Wright’s previous films, Hot Fuzz (2007), Shaun of the Dead (2004) and his TV series Spaced (1999/2001). To conclude, an explanation will be given to the relevance of Wright's editing style to the narrative subtext of Scott Pilgrim etc....
Interim Online Review 15/02/2011
ReplyDeleteHey Sam - a very succinct story idea; my only slight reservation comes in regard to Act 2, where I think you may have to strengthen the threat implied by the technician's interest - by giving this character a toolbelt, or a bin on wheels, or just something to imply more strongly that this guy is the guy who dismantles robot exhibits; indeed, I suggest you do away entirely with the other 2 security guards and make this all about the dismantling guy as the robot's nemesis - it's cleaner that way - and makes it 'character vs. character' and makes the 'dismantle guy' the robot's principle obstacle between him and his goal (freedom). In terms of character design, the 'dismantle guy' can become much more defined and 'villainous' as a result.
Re. your essay - see suggested revisions for punchier, more authoritative tone
ReplyDeleteThis essay analyses the story and structure of Edgar Wright’s Scott Pilgrim vs. The World (2010). The importance of editing in general terms is discussed with reference to Introduction to Film Editing (1989, Bernard Balmuth) and The Thames and Hudson Manual of Film Editing (1981, Roger Crittenden). The specific editing style of Scott Pilgrim vs. the World is discussed with reference to (be specific) and (be specific) and in relation to Wright’s previous films, Hot Fuzz (2007), Shaun of the Dead (2004) and his TV series Spaced (1999/2001). To conclude, an explanation will be given to the relevance of Wright's editing style to the narrative subtext of Scott Pilgrim etc....