Hey Sam - in terms of editing, try cutting on 1:04 and resuming @ 1:08 - at the moment, you've got a 'jump back' feeling between these two sequences and the penetration of the virus is lessened.What happens @ 1:33 when the virus just 'disappears?' This is a big jolt visually? Am I missing something?
These playblasts have been thrown together quickly and without much thought, it’s just to get a basic idea. This does not represent how it will be edited in the final outcome. 1:33 is when the screen cuts to black for a few seconds and there are horrible noises (like in my animatic). When it cuts back the HIV cell has morphed into a disgusting lump.